This is a fanfiction I wrote...can people tell me what they think of it?

Prologue

When you make a typo on the computer, you can adjust your mistakes by pressing the delete button. However, there is no delete button in life. When you make a mistake in life, there is no delete button, and you have to live with that mistake forever. The only other option is to try and fix your mistake in an attempt to fix your life forever…..

My name is Joanne Baek, or in Korean, Baek Joanne. I am just and average ordinary girl. I am not popular, skinny, or gorgeous. I go to an average school like everybody else….The only difference I have from the other students at my school is that I am rich. Yes, I am very rich. My dad is the head of a very famous electronics company in Korea. I have the best friend in the whole world. His name is Park Yoochun. He used to go to school in America with me for a couple of years, and after that, we moved back to Korea together. People have voted us cutest couple before, but we are just friends. Then, there is my school partner Shim Changmin. We have all our classes together. Yes this is a very strange coincidence. We have become friends this year, and are partners in most classes. Since I am not a very good student, he tutors me. Ahh, now there is Kim Junsu, who is my P.E. partner. Our school isn’t those schools that divide teams by gender. Since Junsu is very athletic, and I am not, the P.E. teacher asked Junsu to coach me (By the way, I’m sorry Junsu fans, but he will not appear a lot in the fanfic.) Now, there is Jung Yunho….we are not exactly friends…he is more of the school bully type. (You are wondering why he comes out in this fanfiction then? Keep reading to find out.) At last, there is Kim Jaejoong. I have had a crush on him ever since I came to Korea and saw him at our high school. Last summer, we did use to go out…that was until one day when Jaejoong, I, Micky, and his girlfriend, Catherine, decided to go to the club together after an exhausting day of stress, and studying for the upcoming year. We sat and decided to drink. We all drank a bottle of beer. About an hour later, Jaejoong had a phone call and went outside to answer it while avoiding the loud music. Yoochun and Catherine decided to go on the dance floor. I just sat on my seat drinking, and waiting for Jaejoong. Gosh, what was taking him so long???? I got my purse to go outside and accompany Jaejoong, when I felt a strong arm grab my shoulder. It was some punk asking me if I wanted to dance with him. I refused, and went off. He pulled me and somehow, our lips met. I swear, it was a complete accident. And of course, as luck has it, Jaejoong was right there watching me and a complete stranger kiss. I pulled the guy off of me, and tried to explain to my guy. Jaejoong didn’t believe and ran out of the club. I slapped the punk who had just made out with me, grabbed my purse, and ran out. Jaejoong was a very fast runner; he was nowhere to be seen. He went to the same summer school program (that my mother had forced me to go to) with me. I went there on Tuesdays, Thursdays, and Saturdays, and it was very awkward to see him there after that. That was the first moment of my life that I wanted to erase. I knew I had to fix this, but I had no idea how.